Saturday, April 9, 2011

Say Cheese



I am a crooked line
Hiding inside a face
My little pearly whites
All fighting for a space
The day I lost my babies
Mom took me to this place
And there an orthodontist
Fitted me with a brace



Jumped on the Poetry Bus
Prompt: "I am a crooked line"

17 comments:

The Bug said...

LOL - this brings back memories :)

Lolamouse said...

Very clever and funny! And expensive now that I'm the parent paying for it!

Brian Miller said...

smiles. nice play on the crooked line...i avoided the ortho! wee...

Elaine said...

My poor children have inherited my big teeth and my husbands little mouth. Going to pay for this x2 myself!

evalinn said...

Great take on the prompt! :-)

M. A. S. said...

I love when a really good poem can also be cute. Very good work. My daughter also has big teeth (and too many of them) in her little mouth. Luckily I know when she's 5, so I have time to prepare [save] for braces.

Jinksy said...

A fun ticket you have there! LOL

izzy said...

Crooked to be straight! God I hated braces!!

120 Socks said...

Nice one Elaine, keep smiling!

Doctor FTSE said...

Another great interpretation of the prompt-line.

Peter Goulding said...

I enjoyed the four identical rhymes - good fun. Welcome aboard the bus!

Helen said...

Your poem made me smile and smile and smile! Actually the first thing that came to my mind when I read Bug's prompt was crooked teeth - mine to be precise. Had braces for three years in my 20s!!!

Enchanted Oak said...

Hahahaha!!!

The comment that crooked lines straighten teeth is a riot!

You've done a juicy job here and as you can see, lots of us related! Mine when on in third grade.

Totalfeckineejit said...

Ha!

Totalfeckineejit said...

Stay on the bus!

Joel said...

Hehehe! I like the way you wrote this. It's definitely catchy. I remember those times when I was struggling to eat with my braces. Oh, my teenage years. =)

-Joel Jackson

Bradley Bedell said...

Haha. I love your writing style. :D " My little pearly whites|All fighting for a space" - This part made me smile. Anyway, almost all teenagers suffer from painful braces. Oh, the memories. O.o

Bradley Bedell

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