Sunday, April 17, 2011

Movin' Up

Came off the
rollercoaster ride,
Mr Meloncholy
by my side and
let it slide,
we rode the
moving platform
for a while.
Doc said...
"What's up?"
"I'm down"
I cried. then
he (illegibly)
prescribed a
newer, bluer,
chill pill. 75ml
Now I'm back
on the move
finding my groove,
stuck out my thumb
& hitch hiked,
"cause I like
moving up to
the next level
of numb


dustus said...

An excellent social comment on pez-dispensing—I mean the "alleged" over-proscribing of meds to supposedly cure our blues. Some smooth, wicked rhymes and plays on conceptual opposites.

Claudia said...

..a newer bluer chill pill.. wicked flow and good internal rhymes in this elaine...this grooves for sure and i guess it's not the blue pills...smiles

Brian Miller said...

yikes...medicated existence is not much of one...nice flow elaine

Sheila Moore said...

oh, wow, Elaine.. Great one - the numb of being medicated moving to the next level - I like your rhymes interwoven in here as well.

Elaine said...

Sadly this is all too true. I had a friend who kept leveling up. A sad waste of a life!

Lolamouse said...

I like the jazzy, jaggedy rhythm of this one Elaine. "Next level of numb" is a great description!

hedgewitch said...

This even looks like an escalator, and the language is just as smooth. Great sense of movement and controlled out of control, as it were.

Fireblossom said...

Oh I like this. I agree with Lolamouse!

Eileen T O'Neill ..... said...

Hello Elaine,

Literally a very moving account of a difficult life on various levels. The good and the bad days...

Good to have found your words via Poets United.
Added your Blog to my list!

signed...bkm said...

Nice level of numb...what a great way of putting escape...thank you..bkm

Bethany Ann said...

so many words could be said about the topic. you chose these few so well.

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