Thursday, April 7, 2011

55 - less is more

shrinkwrapped like
deli meat, drinking h2o
on the go, downsized
from a D to a C
so i could B...A
little less of me
and more like what
you want me to be
still you're relentless
and more and more
i'm begining to see
that less of you is
more of what i want



20 comments:

Monkey Man said...

That's the spirit. Great first 55.

Jannie Funster said...

Ah ha, streamlined! The authoress and the 55.

Welcome to the 55s, it's fun, fun, fun!

xo

5thsister said...

Wow! I love your last line: "I'm beginning to see that less of you is more of what I want." Wow. This bit of prose also reminds me of my days, long past, when afflicted with an eating disorder because I wanted what other people wanted me to be rather than be true to my self. Is it true, this is your 1st time? Excellent and standing O for you my new friend!

happygirl said...

A perfect 55. No more, no less.

G-Man said...

Some guys demand their way right out the door don't they? Eh?
Great job on the 55 Elaine.
I hope you found this to be creative, challenging, and FUN!
Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End

dustus said...

I'd say great wordplay, but you broke it down even further to letter-play.
"so i could B, A
little less of me"
Nice!

Elaine said...

Quite the creative challenge to say more with less. Fun though!

Mama Zen said...

Hell, yeah! Love this one!

Margaret said...

HA ha! Very sassy. Great turnaround here.

Brian Miller said...

woohoo...hello...somebody better wake up for they miss out...

Pheromone Girl said...

LOVE this! Fabulous sentiment!

I have been known to purge a companion due to expectations not quite in line with mine.

Great work - welcome!

avoid the clap said...

You won over a new fan here with this inaugural 55. Wow.

Mad Kane said...

I love this one. Really good job!
Mad Kane

anthonynorth said...

This is cleverly written. nice one.

izzy said...

Very real and great job! Thanks.

Eric 'Bubba' Alder said...

Too much of anything can be bad, even if it's goood. (A dieter's mantra!)

Nice 55, Elaine! :)

Claudia said...

clever write - less can indeed be more...

Shanae Branham said...

Very neat! Great poem! I really enjoyed it! I am having a great 55.

Jingle said...

upbeat 55...

thanks for the tickles.

Lisa said...

Brilliantly written.

lisa
InspiredbyLisa

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