shrinkwrapped like
deli meat, drinking h2o
on the go, downsized
from a D to a C
so i could B...A
little less of me
and more like what
you want me to be
still you're relentless
and more and more
i'm begining to see
that less of you is
more of what i want
Wow! I love your last line: "I'm beginning to see that less of you is more of what I want." Wow. This bit of prose also reminds me of my days, long past, when afflicted with an eating disorder because I wanted what other people wanted me to be rather than be true to my self. Is it true, this is your 1st time? Excellent and standing O for you my new friend!
Some guys demand their way right out the door don't they? Eh? Great job on the 55 Elaine. I hope you found this to be creative, challenging, and FUN! Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End
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That's the spirit. Great first 55.
Ah ha, streamlined! The authoress and the 55.
Welcome to the 55s, it's fun, fun, fun!
xo
Wow! I love your last line: "I'm beginning to see that less of you is more of what I want." Wow. This bit of prose also reminds me of my days, long past, when afflicted with an eating disorder because I wanted what other people wanted me to be rather than be true to my self. Is it true, this is your 1st time? Excellent and standing O for you my new friend!
A perfect 55. No more, no less.
Some guys demand their way right out the door don't they? Eh?
Great job on the 55 Elaine.
I hope you found this to be creative, challenging, and FUN!
Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End
I'd say great wordplay, but you broke it down even further to letter-play.
"so i could B, A
little less of me"
Nice!
Quite the creative challenge to say more with less. Fun though!
Hell, yeah! Love this one!
HA ha! Very sassy. Great turnaround here.
woohoo...hello...somebody better wake up for they miss out...
LOVE this! Fabulous sentiment!
I have been known to purge a companion due to expectations not quite in line with mine.
Great work - welcome!
You won over a new fan here with this inaugural 55. Wow.
I love this one. Really good job!
Mad Kane
This is cleverly written. nice one.
Very real and great job! Thanks.
Too much of anything can be bad, even if it's goood. (A dieter's mantra!)
Nice 55, Elaine! :)
clever write - less can indeed be more...
Very neat! Great poem! I really enjoyed it! I am having a great 55.
upbeat 55...
thanks for the tickles.
Brilliantly written.
lisa
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