looking back
I publically maintained
a pillar-like posture
privately crumbling
like iodized decay
under the weight of
her caustic cascade.
shame falling like
like dust at my feet.
she turned again
relishing the moment
and peppered me
tossing angry words
like grenades
over her shoulder
dry and burning
upon fresh wounds
shaken, I had but
one wish : no tears
Thank you to Magpie Tales for the image.
16 comments:
you caught the pain well here!
You and I seem to have been on the same track. :-)
Great take on the prompt! I love "and peppered me".
Berowne, as a believer, I too couldn't tackle the subject without the story of Lots' wife finding its way into the mix. This is my second post for Magpie Tales, and I'm quite enjoying writing outside the "faith-based poetry" box.
Did you catch the word-play in the title A-salt-ed?
Oooh ... very good!
Oh, this strikes such a personal chord with me this week. Beautiful description of discord and pain.
Very very good, nice work here
Particularly, love the last line.."one wish..no tears"..very strong writing..terrific!
I am hearing 'stand by your man' right now and remembering all of those 'no tears' wives!
Good on you, girl. I've cried enough in the past to fill a, well, I'll say 'bucket' for the want of a sizable vessel! I use them sparingly, now!
I loved this piece. Clever and enjoyable. I'll be back!
good write! the two last lines are terrific.
very clever and playful, if a mean circumstance.
I love the wordplay you "sprinkled" in this poem! Despite the subject matter, it was a playful read!
"a pillar-like posture privately crumbling like iodized decay" An inspiration to read!
I could feel the dry salty burn as my eyes pinched from all the residual salt left behind because there were just no more tears to wash it all out and cleanse the soul. Wonderfully inspiring descriptions!
cute and talented tale..
smiles.
Cleverly written.
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